My first love

Hola!

Well, I must say I’m pretty overwhelmed by the response I’ve received from the blogging community, be it in the form of follows, comments, likes or just views. Guess I finally figured how to tap the limitless potential of blogging, huh? (BTW If you are wondering what I’m talking about, then the answer is community participation.)

Hence, I figured you guys deserved a token of appreciation before we start out.

And here it goes!…. 🙂

A thank you from the minions

And now, as a token of gratitude I would now like to skip my rant and get to the point….

(Note:-

  1. For my ‘business only’ readers, I’d like to request you to scroll directly to the part in Italics, for that’s the real thing. This way you’ll avoid all the boredom and distraction caused by my rants.
  2. While my ‘economy’ readers, who do possess the luxury of time can perhaps entertain themselves until we get there. Consider it as a stash of complimentary popcorn.)

At the backstage…

I don’t know whether I’ll be making it into a habit, but this time, I do have a story to tell before we begin.

This post was inspired from a couple of readers (three actually, now that I think of it) :-

The first is my very good friend in real life who suggested me that I should write a poem. I really didn’t give it much thought as I don’t actually imagine myself as poetic. I’m rather the blunt, out in the open kinda person.

But then another reader from a distant corner of the world came across the only post in my mother tongue and said:-

Hey, is this post not meant for us?

I was like no, it’s nothing like that! It’s just that when something came out of the deepest recess of my heart, it did tend to come out in a language which I’ve called my home since birth. I’m sure this holds true for all of us. (Except perhaps those who do have English as their native language… Wonder how that would be like….)

(If you are wondering which post I’m talking about, then it’s this one:- माझं पहिलं प्रेम

Anyways, they were right. I couldn’t let language become a barrier and hence I decided that I would provide an English translation to the same.

Just as I was about to do that, the final push came in from a third blogger who, to my surprise, told me that I was very poetic. (Thanks, BTW!) 🙂

Then it really wasn’t difficult even for a layman like me to put two and two together and work on a poetic translation of my original creation. And that’s how this post was born.

Voila!

So now, without further ado, let’s scrutinize my poetic ability for the first time in my whole life.

Lights, camera aaaand…. Action!

My first love

A whimsical smile escapes my lips,

every time someone asks me this tryst.

But the eyes seem a stranger for they,

only they betray the storm within.

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It all began on just ‘nother day,

for until then everything was the same.

Yet, all of a sudden that moment came,

where on nothing was quite the same.

.

A kid she held in her arms,

her face aglow, caught in his charm.

And as I stared at them, mesmerized,

I knew I had it in for life.

.

For unknowingly my mind had slipped,

adoring the girl instead of the kid.

‘She’s so cute’ it seemed to say,

refraining to double back until ’twas too late.

.

Days went by and so did months,

almost a year was past before something was done.

But luck, God bless it, played it’s part.

And so we met, much more than once.

.

Many a times it was laid to waste,

yet there were moments when hay was made.

Thy hobbies, thy nature was captured, aye.

Like a tiny bee on a mission high.

.

Finally that day did dawn,

when I chose to reveal what I knew from long.

The day was no different, nay,

but what took place next sure was.

A sunset at the beach

twas evening, the sun almost set.

Casting a myriad of shades, it’s net.

And there on the bountiful beach we lay,

with our toes tickled by the mighty waves.

.

The thrashing of the waves, the croaking of the cranes,

were the only sounds that were ever made.

For what possible role could the words have played?

except perhaps fail to describe the same.

.

To reassure the other it seemed,

our hands intertwined, marking a seam.

And just before the ocean could swallow the sun whole,

Our eyes met, lighting up our face as one.

.

If only this were a story,

then may be it would’ve ended in this glory.

But life ain’t just a story,

’tis a compilation of a million more.

.

So what really went on that day?

Oh a hell lot more than I’d ever wish to say.

We talked, we discussed, went back and forth.

An exchange of ideation, information, lot more.

.

That day I got to know her better,

we thought so alike yet not quite.

For as it progressed, I realized,

my respect increased and my despair alike.

.

Towards the end I felt,

a pit in the chest that would never fill.

I was so close yet impossibly far,

as though chasing a mirage in the desert Thar.

.

Eventually it was concluded that,

in cherishing friendship lay our interests stat.

Alas sealing my feelings, the prerequisite,

was something I could never fulfill.

.

How I wish it were that simple,

sealing my feelings as though a bin.

The only thing which was ever asked,

summarised everything impossible for me.

.

Even today, we cross ‘other’s path.

And somehow those feelings never fail to crawl.

Bold enough to hope that someday,

that would be a real story.

.

– Soumitra Patil.

Silver lining. Rays of sunshine.

For there’s always a silver lining…

68 Comments Add yours

  1. Superlike! The third person was bang-on, you really are poetic! One really tough part about writing(from my limited experience) is conveying emotions which we originally express in our mother tongue into another language without losing the gravity or intensity of what we originally wished to convey and you have managed to smash that barrier to pieces. Exemplary work!

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    1. soumitra97 says:

      Thank you so much! 🙂

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  2. CloudandSunshine says:

    Hey! I just wanted to let you know that I nominated you for the Liebster Award! If you choose to accept it you can check out your nomination and find out more information about the award through my post. Here’s the link:
    https://cloudandsunshine.com/2018/02/22/liebster-award-2018/

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    1. soumitra97 says:

      Thanks a million for the nomination! I’m really overwhelmed that you chose me as a nominee amongst the gazillion newbies out there! I’ll be participating most likely. But maybe a little while later. ✌️

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      1. CloudandSunshine says:

        No problem. Do it when you find time. And you totally deserve it. 😀

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  3. booknook867 says:

    Well, for someone who’s not poetic, I’d say that’s the most poetic poem I’ve read in quite a while. Kudos to you!
    …also, wonderful blog. And I love the Pensieve. Such a clever idea at first, and then when you think about what a Pensieve symbolizes, it becomes even more clever…coming from a Harry Potter fan 🙂

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    1. soumitra97 says:

      Thanks a million for your kind words! 😄. About the name…. To be honest, I was searching for an appropriate name for quite sometime. So one fine day, I just begun defining what my blog was all about. And then I realized how closely it resembled a Pensieve, for Dumbledore’s words rang through my head. I knew there and then that I had found what I had been looking for. ✌️

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      1. booknook867 says:

        Well, it’s amazing! Good choice 😀

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  4. cyphr says:

    Hello there… please I need help on how to use tags on my posts

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    1. soumitra97 says:

      Hi! Oh, it’s pretty simple actually. What you have to do is select/open the post to which you have to add tags. Next, select the ‘settings’ icon. In there, you will find categories, tags, excerpt and slug for your post. Just select the tag option and add whatever tags you deem fit. It’s custom, so you have the liberty of typing your own unique tags. Next, just exit the window and save/update the post. Voila!

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  5. cyphr says:

    Plus your work is really awe-inspiring

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  6. Congratulations on achieving the milestone & I love the poem, do write & share more poetry.

    I also wanted to inform you that I have nominated you for the Liebster Award. I published the post on the award 🏆 and if you’d like to take a look here’s the🔗 link

    https://educatedunemployedindian.wordpress.com/2018/03/04/i-am-nominated-now-what-the-liebster-award/

    Hope this will make you happy and I can’t wait to read your answers to my questions 🙂

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    1. soumitra97 says:

      Thank you! 🙂
      Wow! I’m really flattered by the nomination. Especially seeing that it’s the second nomination for the same post! Now I’m in a pickle… I guess I’ll have to choose between your questions and cloudandsunshine’s questions. Help me out here! 😅

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      1. You are most welcome.
        Can I suggest that you choose few questions from each nomination.
        That’s what I did.

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        1. soumitra97 says:

          Oh. That sounds perfect. Thanks! 🙂

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  7. Sam Gatana says:

    Beautiful. I’m in awe. Great work. Yes, I echo the earlier comment, its been a while since I experienced such poetic enthralling in a well put way. Kudos!

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    1. soumitra97 says:

      Thanks a million for your kind words! 🙂 It’s thanks to people like you that I find the inspiration to keep writing. ✌️

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      1. Sam Gatana says:

        Well, keep it up. It’s amazing!

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  8. lobouniverse says:

    Keep it up. After a long time read something in Marathi

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    1. The Pensieve says:

      धन्यवाद! 😄

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  9. Wow, very well done! I was with you the whole poem, especially by the end because I’ve felt the same way. I am in awe that you can translate your poem with such beautiful prose in the final result. I can only imagine how beautifully it’s written in your native language. Bravo!

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    1. The Pensieve says:

      Thank you so much! It’s really nice to hear that I could strike a chord somewhere with a reader. After all, that’s how a writer derives true joy! 🙂

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  10. I loved the complimentary popcorn. And true, your poem was good too 👌

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  11. chinntha says:

    माझं पहिलं प्रेम
    who doesn’t have one?
    mine was with muh bicycle
    that my bro swore was his very own.
    i raged ‘n swooned,
    tricked him into partin’…
    till a flat tyre
    had me offerin’ it back…
    Big deal!

    by then,
    the bike next door caught muh fancy,
    can’t blame me
    if the neighbour lined up
    for yet another love goal!
    ;p

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  12. The Pensieve says:

    I’m sorry…. I really didn’t get your point. Are you trying to compare the narrator’s experience with something as materialistic, trivial and childish as a bicycle?! 🤔

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    1. chinntha says:

      not at all, mon ami…the experience of first love can never be the same for all…yeah in hindsight, a bicycle may seem trivial but when caught in the throes, one doesn’t rationalise…

      the narrator’s experience holds no comparison to something as trivial as this…on the contrary, the love narrated here bespoke of holy ground unsullied by coarser feelings…

      yet what defines love is wholly at the mercy of its creator…hatred too -i have heard some say- is a form of love in its vilest form…not that i need to ascribe to the same.

      God Bless!

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      1. The Pensieve says:

        That’s true as well…. Guess we just went overboard, huh? Hatred… Honestly hatred is a very obvious suggestion that you feel something about that person. It suggests that whether one way or another, you do care what happens to the person. Further… It’s open to discussion.

        It’s indifference we should be really worried about. For that’s the real opposite of love. Not caring AT ALL.

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        1. chintha says:

          yup…you are bang on target…it’s Indifference indeed that we need to be wary of… 😔

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  13. Hey, I love your posts and as such, have nominated you for the Sunshine Blogger Award. Check out the nomination on my lastest blog post 🙂

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    1. The Pensieve says:

      Thank you! 🙂 I’m really flattered by the nomination. Will be sure to check it out! ✌️

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  14. shellbell37 says:

    I loved this, I travelled this journey myself but could never have told it in such a beautiful and mesmerising way! You have a real gift – you are a poet!!

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    1. The Pensieve says:

      That’s so nice of you. Thank you! 🙂
      I’m sorry to hear that you had to go through this journey yourself as well. I hope you find peace. ✌️

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  15. shellbell37 says:

    I have nominated you for the 2018 Liebster Award at this link https://wordpress.com/post/shellbell37.blog/191

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    1. The Pensieve says:

      Thank you so much for your nomination! 🙂 I’ll surely pass it a look. Although I’ve previously received two nominations for the very same post. So I’m kinda in a twist right now… 😅

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  16. Amazing and beautiful 😊

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  17. Shubhi says:

    Its beautiful! You indeed are poetic. Just amazing.

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    1. The Pensieve says:

      Thank you so much! 😊

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  18. Woah…I think you are quite more poetic than you think yourself to be! The way you described your emotions throughout the poem made me visualise the poem like a movie or rather, a journey…You really do captivate people with your writing!

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    1. The Pensieve says:

      Thank you so much! 🙂

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  19. Beautifully written ❤☺

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  20. Tom Burton says:

    Fantastic writing! You really immerse the reader in the scene. Lovely imagery! 🙂

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    1. The Pensieve says:

      Thank you so much! 🙂

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  21. Though I am not a poet,I tell you I enjoyed going through and the way you put it.shukriya.

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  22. Very nice poem; very interesting blog. I read through a whole bag of popcorn – which had to be at least an hour or so. Very unusual for me. Will visit again soon!

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    1. The Pensieve says:

      😅😂😂

      Well, thank you so much Gail for visiting my site and the wonderful compliments! I hope to see you again real soon!

      And I’ll be returning the favour too! I’m sure you must be having a delightful stash of popcorn as well! 😁

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  23. That’s wonderful! I missed it the first time, so, its good to read now!

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    1. The Pensieve says:

      Thank you so much for your kind feedback! I am really glad to hear that you liked it. Stay safe and stay tuned! 😊✌️

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      1. You are very welcome!! Thank you, you too!!

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  24. anne leueen says:

    I’m glad you gave us the English so I could read this tale. I do not call it a tale lightly. This tale carries me with it from start to finish.

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    1. The Pensieve says:

      Thank you so much for saying that Anne! 😁 I am really pleased to hear that you think so, seeing that it’s indeed based on one. Stay safe and stay tuned! ✌️

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  25. Anand Bose says:

    very Tender, Passionate, bubbling with the rhythms of the heart. Anand Bose from Kerala

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    1. The Pensieve says:

      Thanks a lot Kamal! 😁

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