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I’m back! And here is another poem of mine. Do let me know what you think about it in the comments below. I appreciate all sorts of feedback! 🙂


Dust lies undisturbed

Rust settles on the chest

Yet it appears perturbed

Inside, mayhem aches to rest.

Towards the trunk, she stumbles

Charmed by its antiquity

As she nears it, thunder rumbles

But she is urged forward by curiosity.

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The lock is broken

Yet the chest looks regal

The child within her has woken

Flying ahead like a seagull.

Shivers pace her veins

As her fingers trace the iron handle

Her imagination has liberated from chains

And hope is lit, bright as a candle.

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Hesitation greets her with belligerence

Overwhelmed, she fears what lies inside

Paranoia clashes with indignance

Battle compels her to choose a side.

Years of experience make her paranoid

Coerces her to expect the worst

She is afraid to fall into the void

Afraid to be consumed by thirst.

Yet the child envisions wonders hidden

Visions that perplex the sane

A dream which was forbidden

Amongst the mountains and the rain.

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Selfish as she has been

She still craves to see it all

Her eyes covered by a sheen

Curiosity has won the brawl.

As she opens the cracked lid

Two broken things make contact

This is where the Unknown hid

And yet the chest has remained intact.

As hope, we rise

As dust and shadows, we fall

Just as a baby cries

And the dead answer its call.


What did you think of this poem and what do you think was inside the chest? Let me know in the comments down below.

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26 Comments Add yours

  1. Tom Burton says:

    Lovely poem, Rashi! Great rhyming verses & vivid imagery 🙂

    Liked by 2 people

    1. Rashi Singh says:

      Thanks, Tom! What do you think was inside the chest?

      Liked by 2 people

      1. Tom Burton says:

        Mysterious! Sounds like a portal to a magical world. 🙂

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  2. The Pensieve says:

    Great work, Rashi! I enjoyed reading it! Might be one of your best works yet again! Keep it up! 😀✌️

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    1. Rashi Singh says:

      Thanks a lot!! Ok, I don’t want yo be a pest about it but I’m curious, so I’ll ask. What do you think was inside the chest?

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      1. The Pensieve says:

        Well.. I guess it kind of gave me the impression of Pandora’s box. Although, to be honest, I didn’t actually give it much thought. I was more engrossed in the vividity of your poetry itself😅

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        1. Rashi Singh says:

          Pandora’s box?😁 Cool, so you thought that the only thing left in the box was hope?
          Gee, thanks again. And a huge thanks for letting me post my work here. I can’t be grateful enough.

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          1. The Pensieve says:

            Well… Of course! It was my pleasure to host you dear! 😊

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  3. This was a beautiful poem. It’s right up my alley content-wise. It had very good flow except in a couple parts where the lines felt a little shaky, but overall dead on perfect! I think she found an amulet and a journal inside, the journal signifying ancestry several generations ago that link her to a line of witchcraft. Will she accept it or deny it as her parents and grandparents did?

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    1. This so intriguing!!!
      What’s inside the chest Rashi?

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      1. Rashi Singh says:

        Oh, I don’t know. Something which changes her outlook on life? An amulet? Maybe it’s just metaphorical. Maybe, the chest is just a change whih she is approaching…Can be anything. According to your imagination! I’d love to hear about it.

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        1. I think there’s a broken mirror in the chest.
          The unknown hiding inside the chest is our own reflection, we are afraid sometimes to realize ourselves only … Afraid of what will come out of us but that needs to be unleashed! And then two broken things make contact… The broken mirror makes contact with the broken heart of the girl.
          This is what I thought 😅

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          1. Rashi Singh says:

            Wow! This is why I love hearing others’ speculations…Love your imagination! Wow,it actually makes so much senese because of the “two broken things make contact” line. Thanks a lot for sharing your thoughts!

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          2. My pleasure dear! 😄
            I’ve read the poetry a dozen times and I enjoyed it so much!💝

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          3. Rashi Singh says:

            Aww! Thanks a lot, Bhavya! Your comment made me realllly happy!😀

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  4. findprasanna says:

    Sounded great when I read it out aloud. Pandora’s box or ones own chest of hopes?!?

    Liked by 2 people

    1. Rashi Singh says:

      Thanks! Love the sound of one’s own chest of hopes!

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  5. johnlmalone says:

    I like what you’re trying to do: tease our imagination, our curiosity but I don’t think there are enough clues to suggest what it might be but I really wanted to know so the poem worked

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    1. Rashi Singh says:

      Yes, I know there weren’t many clues but it’s fun to see what your mind can imagine even with a few words…And thanks a lot for reading, John!

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  6. Tamara says:

    Deep and boundless! Exquisite!

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    1. Rashi Singh says:

      Thank you for using such beautiful terms to describe poem , Tamara.

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  7. ktkinnes says:

    An intriguing read, but I loved it! Your use of language and imagery was beautiful. I still haven’t decided what was in the chest, and I’ve now read it 3 times!

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    1. Rashi Singh says:

      Thank you so much. Wow! Three times, really? I’m so happy that my poem got you thinking.

      Liked by 1 person

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